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DA: In Another LifeSummary: It is the eve of the Battle of Denerim and the Warden comforts their love, Leliana. Female Cousland X Leliana, Oneshot, partly AU
“Lady Cousland.” Muttered a soldier, recognizing the young woman who walked across the battlefield. His lower lip trembled as we watched the girl look away. He was one of the few surviving soldiers and he had seen the Archdemon, barely escaping its claws.
The Grey Wardens…The ones who can fight the Darkspawn.
He felt an ominous feeling.
“I don’t think I got your name back at the bar. Surely, you are not just Lady Cousland or the Grey Warden?” asked Leliana, eyeing the girl. Nineteen years old and looking much younger.
The barely twenty-year old girl walked into the tent and sat down on the floor, looking at the horizon. She tucked a lock of blond hair behind her ear. Denerim seemed quiet, almost peaceful. The sound of familiar footsteps walking towards her. She gritted her teeth and looked down

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GM: Task 9 - Poses 7by ~EzzyAlpha

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~mizz-izzy Oct 22, 2012

Overall the pose looks good. I think the right arm looks off though. I also like the flow of her hair, it helps add to the feeling of movement.

~Roselink-Noodle Oct 20, 2012 Student Traditional Artist

this is nice

Try varying the oen pressure a bit more and fix the arm. It's the main thing throwing off the piece because of its placement and foreshortening is off. Good luck with the revision.

~Flaming-Noodle Oct 20, 2012 Student General Artist

EVALUATION FORM:

Hi! This is Flaming-Noodle. I am here to evaluate your task for #Gakuen-Manga

STRONG POINTS
-visable pen pressure
-moderatly clean linework
-I really like this pose

-her torso and lower half look good
-the face is really good

POINTS to IMPROVE
-The shadow on her neck could be angles down towards her left breast rather than being almost straight across her neck.
-Her left arm seems awkward because it doesnt foreshorten right-almost like her shoulders aren't aligned with each other. Currently, her left one is aligned with the shoulder blade-and there is not shoulder. If this were adjusted it would be easier to note and fix the arm itself.

OVERALL RATING

of 5 stars

Overall, this is really good and seeing this really got me excited-it's really good. The majority of the body flows nice with the postion it's in-with the exception of her left arm and shoulder. Her hip area is beautiful btw!

But her arm does somewhat distract from her overall feel...

Congrats you pass. I would still suggest revising this to fix her arm and then moving on to the next task, but since you did pass-it's up to you if you'd like to revise this or move on to the next task. Best of Luck ^_^V

~EzzyAlpha Oct 20, 2012 Student Digital Artist

Okay thank you, I think I will redo it, it should be a quick fix

~Flaming-Noodle Oct 20, 2012 Student General Artist

lol ok ^_^V

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